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    Several years ago (more than a decade) I wrote this remake of Dallas in synopsis format, starting from when Pam lost the first baby at the BBQ. I found it and decided to share.


    Season One: Following Pam’s incident with losing her baby, J.R. requests Ray’s help to break up Pam and Bobby; but Ray refuses. An angry J.R. confronts Ray’s ex-wife who wants full custody of their children and offers her evidence of Ray’s different women, including Lucy, a minor. Bobby meets his old sweetheart from school, Donna McCullum Culver, who is a recent divorcee from power-hungry ex-husband, Sam. Pam slowly slips into depression and pushes Bobby away, and Bobby spends time with Donna. Ray’s greedy ex-wife delivers him a subpoena and fights him in court. Pam sees Donna and Bobby together and begins to dwell on it, then feels feelings of deep anger. J.R. and Ray’s ex-wife start to sleep together, and Sue Ellen sees it. When J.R. tells her that if she tells Ray she’s going to be banished from SF, she eagerly tells him, “It’s about time…” Bobby fixes Donna’s roof and accidentally kisses her, but he doesn’t let up, as his and Pam’s marriage is nearly done. Jack, his wife April and his sister Jamie arrive in town following Jason’s fatal heart attack, and Jock reluctantly welcomes them into his home. Despite his divorce case, J.R. finds time to look into their pasts. Following the court case which inadvertantly places Ray’s children in care of his Aunt Lil Trotter, young April develops a crush on him, but he sees her as just another Lucy. The SF home is empty one evening, and J.R. and Ray’s ex-wife hit the sheets together… but in Bobby’s room by accident due to them being drunk. They both devise a plan to ruin Ray. Pam enters the house and reveals a revolver from her purse. She continues up the stairs, and either J.R. or Ray’s ex gets out of bed and heads into the bathroom. Pam hears voices in the closed room and thinks Bobby and Donna are together. She bursts through the door and fires at whomever’s in bed…

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    Season Two: A figure is rushed to Dallas Memorial, and the entire family comes. J.R. is severely injured, and Ray’s ex-wife speaks with a specialist about her traumatic experience. Pam is placed in the sanitarium, where doctors says she has slipped into a catatonic state and may never recover. Immature April continues to make a play for Ray at the hospital, and he points out that he thinks she’s a selfish young girl who married Jack Ewing for his money. But instead of trying to push her away, Ray decides to help her see the truth, as he thinks she’s just been misguided in her life. J.R. begins to recover and learns Ray’s ex-wife has moved to be closer to her children. April starts to see the light in Ray’s words and admits that she was raised in a poor home with a broken family and was taught to find a man with money. Ray starts to feel for her, too; but he’s afraid to admit it. Donna and Bobby marry following Bobby’s divorce from Pam. Recovering, J.R. discovers that Jason’s wife fooled around on him and learns there’s a chance Jamie and/or Jack may not be his cousins after all. Jack sees April’s affection change for him and ultimately breaks up with her, but on good terms. She admits she was out for the money, while he was in for the lust. Bobby and Donna begin to feel their marriage falter and hear Jock and Ellie talk about them behind their backs. Lucy takes up with a shady mobster (Al Pacino) much older than her who’s out for vengeance against the Ewings, especially J.R., whom he blaims for the death of his wife. The mobster’s mother (Beatrice Arthur) arrives in town and remembers her past with Jock.

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    Season Three: Bobby begins to visit Pam at the sanitarium, though she is unresponsive. Donna thinks it’s time to divorce Bobby, and she runs into her old flame, Ray Krebbs. The mobster lures Lucy into an engagement, and his mother finally admits that he is Jock’s son before the marriage. J.R. is enraged about his new half-brother, but he is even more surprised when he learns who he is. McSween accidentally sees Sue Ellen while on vacation in Florida and sees her with a baby, then reports back to J.R. Jack and Jamie leave Dallas with news of their paternity, and Ray proposes to April despite having lingering feelings for Donna. J.R confronts Sue Ellen and meets her new husband, Tony LaRose. Sue Ellen admits that her son, John Ross, was fathered by Tony; then J.R. catches her in a lie when his birthday is almost exactly nine months after their divorce and their last time in bed. J.R.’s half-brother confronts him before leaving Dallas and says he wanted to kill SE so they’d be even, but now he has gotten over his anger. The mobster leaves and cuts ties to the Ewings, upsetting Jock but pleasing Ellie. Ray’s car breaks down outside Donna’s house in Braddock, and after waiting there, they make love. Ray plans to leave April, but she announces her pregnancy. J.R. gives false proof declaring Sue Ellen to be a bad mother, and SE watches as the feds take her baby from her house and hand him to J.R. waiting in the limo.

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    Season Four: April’s spiteful younger sister, Michelle, arrives in town, following her mother’s death, and moves in with Ray and April. Michelle begins to take an interest in single Bobby, but he puts her off. Ray and April are married at a Protestant church in Braddock, and Jock presents Ray with Section 40 of Southfork as a wedding present. Michelle begins to fail in school, and when April has had enough, Ray intervenes and tutors Michelle in her algebra while learning it himself. After Michelle passes her semester exam, April begins to see harmless flirting between her and Ray and begins to dwell on it. April suffers a miscarriage, and it leads to the end of their marriage. Donna meets with Carter McKay, who has taken over after Jeremy Wendell’s death. Donna reluctantly agrees to be the company’s lobbyist in Washington, DC to reduce the price of oil shipping. J.R., who owns a major shipping line, is appalled at West Star’s efforts and looks to Donna’s own stepson, Dave Culver, to help him. Donna is hurt by Dave’s decision, and J.R. watches as Donna begins to his side of things. Sue Ellen’s husband, Tony LaRose, seems to like the green more than the honey and secretly decides to work in J.R.’s favor in the custody hearing-for a large sum of money. Jock and Ellie celebrate their golden anniversary with an elaborate party at Southfork. While getting ready for the party, Ray comes across his birth certificate which states that he is Jock’s son. At the party, Ray shows this to Jock and Ellie, and the family and guests react in a shocked manner.

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    Season Five: Miss Ellie is sick and tired of Jock’s illegitimate children showing up and all the lies and decides to leave with without clearly thinking. Of course, J.R. wins again and puts out McKay and Donna’s lobbying. Donna shows up at Ray’s after having learned of his paternity and acts as a good friend to him. They admit they still love each other, but Ray needs time to think clearly. J.R. moves John Ross with him to Jock’s new home in Dallas. Carter McKay, who grew up with Ellie, admits he still cares for her. Harv Smithfield tries to talk Ellie out of the divorce, but Ellie will not give in. April and Michelle’s old hard feelings for each other arise when they bring up their dark adolesence together. Michelle and Tony begin an affair, which Sue Ellen sees. SE kicks Tony to the curb and vows not to let J.R. take her son. Ray and Donna try to mend Jock and Ellie, but they are at no luck. Ray’s stepfather, Amos Krebbs, who left him and his mother, arrives and admits his sorrow for not telling Ray the truth. Amos and Ray say farewell still on bad terms, and nothing Donna says can fix it. Jock and Ellie’s divorce is finalized, and Ray and Donna invite everyone to their wedding at their home on Section 40. Bobby returns home from spending time with catatonic Pam for the wedding. April shows up at the wedding having opted not to go, and she and Ray put away any hard feelings that were between them, then agree to be friends. Before this, Ellie started to reluctantly date Carter at his persistence. Unknown to anyone, Ray invited both Jock and Ellie… But they remain quiet during the ceremony, then get after Ray and Donna afterwards. After Ray and Donna shove down their throats that they still love each other, Ellie and Carter leave angrily. Before the final hearing, J.R. and Sue Ellen find themselves trapped in a beach house in Florida during a hurricane, following a mixup, and make the best of things without electricity… Alone at Southfork at night, Bobby sits alone by the pool and hears foot steps. He turns around and sees Pam.

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    Season Six: Pam tells an utterly speechless Bobby that she got out of her catatonic state and apologizes for the way she’s acted. Pam becomes anxious and upset after Bobby tells her he divorced her; then Pam takes off in her car. Bobby informs the family about Pam’s return and about her current status. Miss Ellie begins to worry for her family’s safety since Pam tried to kill Bobby, almost killing J.R. in the process. Carter becomes impatient with Ellie and won’t listen to ‘whining.’ In Florida J.R. and Sue Ellen make love, then later deny it to each other. The hearing comes about, and the judge grants joint custody, much to their dismay. Carter proposes to Ellie, but she is undecided. A critical Jock tells Ellie at a Southfork barbeque that she’ll never marry again since she’ll be stuck on him. Out of spite Ellie announces on the stadium that she has accepted Carter’s proposal, shocking everyone. Bobby tells Pam that he still loves her very much, and Pam finally gives in. Pam begins to see Tony LaRose on the side, who’s through with Michelle, and tells him that her ‘reunion’ with Bobby is just an act and plans on making both him and Donna pay mercilessly. Sue Ellen discovers she’s pregnant and decides to have an abortion. J.R.’s private detectives who keep track of John Ross while at SE’s find out about SE’s trips to the doctors, and J.R. inquires. J.R., finding out, confronts his ex-wife and demands to know if he’s the father. SE tells him she’s already aborted it, but in reality she hasn’t and hastily decides what to do. The night of Pam and Bobby’s remarriage is a dark and stormy one. Pam and Bobby stay the night before going on their honeymoon. The electricity goes out, and eerie things begin to happen. The first set of things to happen is a gun shot followed by someone falling down the stairs to their death: Tony. The family decides to call the police, but the lines are down, and tornadic weather in the vicinity has them trapped in. A cloaked figure begins to strangle Carter from behind, but he gets away before possibly dying. Donna stands alone by the balcony overlooking the pool and comes face-to-face with the killer, Pam. A struggle ensues, and a shot goes off before both women falls into the pool… Blood later takes over the clear-colored pool water.

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    Season Seven: The family is temporarily silenced by the death of Donna and Pam’s disappearance. A vengeful Ray vows to bring down Pam for what she’s done, and April tries to console him. Michelle is confronted by an agent and agrees to go to Hollywood. Miss Ellie vows to change her whole life around from being Jock’s housewife, and she opens a floral shop in Braddock. J.R. is no fool and quickly learns that Sue Ellen is still pregnant. But before he can confront her, she and John Ross are presumed dead in a plane crash which he keeps hidden from the rest of the family. Carter McKay’s ex-wife (Dolly Parton) arrives in town, much to his dismay. The gold digger takes an interest in lonely Jock and pushes all the right buttons to get to him. Bobby and April work together to lure Pam out of hiding and learn that she’s hiding in Paris, so they leave for there. Miss Ellie wants to up the date to the wedding, and Carter starts to become suspicious. Ray learns that Bobby and April have gone to Paris and quickly follows. A secretly mourning J.R. gets word that SE faked hers and John Ross’s deaths and is using a fake identity from McSween. J.R. finds them in Chicago, and SE goes into labor as they argue. J.R., with the help of 911, helps SE give birth to their daughter, Teresa Anne. Bobby and April fall in love while searching for Pam and receive word to meet her at a masquerade ball. As Bobby and April are about to be shot by Pam, Ray rushes in followed by gun shots.

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    Season Eight: J.R. brings Sue Ellen, John Ross and Teresa Anne back to Dallas. He tries to reconcile with SE, but she doesn’t buy his BS. Pamela and several others are killed in the crossfire. April is also injured and taken to the hospital. There Ray learns about Bobby and April falling in love and takes it in a shocked way. Mrs. McKay proposes to Jock, but he tells her he wants his money to go to his kids. This makes her furious and makes her act hastily, as she is the only one who knows that Jock is dying of prostate cancer. Miss Ellie and Jock both share their abounding happiness about the addition of their new granddaughter. Mrs. McKay finds herself attracted to J.R., and he the same. Sometime after her time in bed with J.R., she learns she’s pregnant and tells Jock he’s the father. He immediately marries her, although he doesn’t love her. J.R. spends time with Sue Ellen and their children, then tries to convince her he wants to make the marriage work. J.R. feels that SE is buying it and believes he’ll soon have all his children under his roof with him, Jock and Jock’s new wife. Miss Ellie learns about Jock’s marriage and finally gets set on a date to marry McKay. Ray makes plans to move by his ex-wife and children who are by his Aunt Lil’s, and April begins to have feelings shift over to Ray again. Bobby sees this and lets go of her painfully. While driving, Jock’s car begins to give him trouble, and he eventually spirals off a curve… At the same time, Miss Ellie and Carter are married at Southfork.

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    Season Nine: Miss Ellie puts off her honeymoon when she learns about Jock’s death. Jock’s wife puts on her sad face before the funeral, although she is thrilled. J.R. puts off proposing to SE until the pain of Jock has passed. Cliff and Lucy, who are now married, return briefly for Jock’s funeral. Cliff blames Bobby for Pam’s mental situation and her death which puts Bobby further into his depression. At the will reading, Jock’s widow is puzzled when her inheritance reads a jail sentence. Suddenly, Jock walks in with McSween. They cart her off to jail. He knew she was trying to kill him off from the beginning and partnered with J.R. to bring her down. Miss Ellie gives Jock a big slap on the face for the pain he brought the rest of the family. Miss Ellie’s floral business begins to decline, and she is forced to sell out. Carter does his best to help her through her situation, but she rejects him. Carter knows deep down she will always love Jock but decides to stay with her. A teenaged girl named Charlie Wade arrives at Southfork and claims to be Bobby’s daughter.

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    Season Ten: Bobby learns that this girl, Charlie, is the child of his ex-flame, Jenna Wade, and welcomes her into his home. Jock’s soon-to-be-ex-wife contacts J.R. in prison to tell him that the baby she’s carrying is his just before his marriage to Sue Ellen, and this leaves him puzzled. He calls off the wedding without saying much and bails out his stepmother. They make a deal that she’ll leave the country and never get in contact again if she hands over her offspring at birth. Jenna arrives at Southfork to claim her daughter, and she and Bobby have a long talk about why she kept Charlie from him. Bobby doesn’t buy it, claiming she had no right. Carter spends more time at a collapsing West Star Oil, and Miss Ellie slips into depression. Bobby’s depression goes away as he catches up with Charlie, and then Jenna is killed in an auto wreck. Charlie finds it hard to adjust to living at Southfork and runs away. She appears at Jock and J.R.’s house, where Jock lets Bobby know of her location. J.R. tries to set a wedding date with an angered Sue Ellen, who tells him to get out of her life. Carter takes up with J.R.’s ex-secretary, Julie Grey, who returns after quitting EO in 78. Miss Ellie, unknown to this, receives a visit from Jock, and they admit that they never stopped loving each other despite whatever they may have said. It’s a difficult bout, but Bobby makes Charlie comfortable at Southfork. From Athens, Greece, Jock’s ex-wife is informed by Dr. Danvers that his condition is worsening and that the fact of them still being legally married is a secret.

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    Season Eleven: Jock begins to suffer excruciating pains and finally visits the doctors where he learns of his inoperable condition. Miss Ellie finds Carter and Julie together, then runs out of West Star. Miss Ellie runs into the street only to be hit by an oncoming car. Bobby, who accompanied Charlie to her senior prom, arrives home to receive information that ME is the hospital. The doctors inform everyone that she has suffered severe internal bleeding and most likely won’t pull through the night. McKay reluctantly enters the room, but he is booted out by the Ewings. Jock and J.R. head home to work on some business procedures, thinking she will leave. Sue Ellen arrives to console Bobby and Charlie. The three of them awaken the next morning to learn Miss Ellie has died. A grieving McKay accidentally learns about his first wife’s scheme, but she puts the cabash on him ratting her out by blowing up his office story of West Star. J.R. meets Julie, and an old flame erupts between them. Bobby and Sue Ellen grow close out of Miss Ellie’s death and eventually get together. McKay’s ex-wife miscarries, but she keeps it a secret from J.R. She sends a bomb out to Southfork, where J.R. and Jock have moved back to. The season ends with the infamous ranch house going up in flames…

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    Season Twelve: Following the explosion which claimed no lives, the Ewings feel it’s best to leave the country, so they fly to Athens-not knowing their enemy is there… Bobby and Sue Ellen continue to grow closer, but there’s no real passion there. They both agree it would be a mistake and break up mutually. Mrs. McKay-Ewing (sorry, I still can’t think of a good first name for her) surprisingly has the Ewings right where she wants them. A drive-by shooting is performed on the Ewings’ villa, claiming Julie Grey’s life. J.R. grieves briefly, but when the others want to get going, he feels that they can’t run forever and look to find the enemy. J.R. and Sue Ellen get back together in the midst of all the disasters and decide to marry again. Jock confronts his legal wife and learns that she has prepared a false will which leaves everything to her… because their divorce was never finalized. Jock begins to suffer from severe pains at her feet, but he has the strength to detonate one of the bombs on the nearby table, claiming him, his wife and her henchmen.

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    Season Thirteen: The season opens with the Ewings all returning to Dallas and resuming their lives following the Athens ordeal of the previous season. A more modern Southfork is built where the old one once laid. Jock is mourned, but J.R. vows to keep his company running afloat and never let anyone get their hands on it. This season is more of a season of repair-the return of the Ewings to SF. Ray and a pregnant April return for Jock’s funeral and decide to live at their old home on Section 40-but with major renovations for their growing family. Cliff and Lucy return to claim their shares of EO left to them by Jock but are shocked to learn that they get nothing. J.R. laughs them out of Texas. Bobby supports Charlie through her engagement and eventual wedding to her high school beau. J.R. and Sue Ellen feel that they’ve waited long enough, and the season concludes with them remarrying at Southfork.

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    Season Fourteen: J.R. and Sue Ellen spend their honeymoon in Hawaii, but they are monitored by a mysterious woman and her bodyguards. Charlie learns she is pregnant after she and her husband, Lance Gardner, decided not to have children immediately. Sharing the news with him, he reacts in an angered manner and orders her to have an abortion, but she flat out refuses. Lance walks out on her, and Charlie turns to her father for advice. He tells her that he will help her raise her child or children. Ray finds himself acting against April’s decision to run for park commissioner of Braddock while being pregnant, but she says she needs something to do. Leona Krebbs, Ray’s first wife from the first season of my series, returns briefly to Dallas and tells April that she is on the path to losing Ray because of his jealousy to success. April politely tells her to go to Hell. Charlie and Lance discuss reconciliation, but Lance tells her that he wants no part in any child’s life. Charlie feels that she married too soon and agrees to a divorce. J.R. and Sue Ellen notice that they’re being watched and make plans to leave the small island, but they’re passports are taken at the airport. They soon learn that Grace McKay-Ewing, Dolly Parton’s character, owns the island, and she tells them they won’t be leaving alive. The Ewings become concerned when they are unable to contact J.R. and Sue Ellen. April goes into labor and delivers Meara. Charlie seeks April’s advice on child delivery and rearing, and they become good friends. Bobby and Ray make a flight to the small island, but their plane is denied access to land. They land at a nearby island and take a boat. J.R. and Sue Ellen are kept separated from each other, and when Sue Ellen learns of her pregnancy, Grace plans to abort it in compensation for her miscarried child. Bobby and Ray obtain military help from another Hawaiian island and perform a raid. Most of the island is captured, and J.R. is freed. However, Ray falls into the water and doesn’t emerge. They all look for Grace and Sue Ellen, who are kept in the governess’ mansion. J.R. comes face-to-face with them and kills Grace before she can get to Sue Ellen. J.R. reacts painfully to the news that her child’s life was claimed. Bobby tells them of Ray’s fate and wonder how to break it to April. While in the final hearing for the divorce, Charlie goes into labor, and Lance plans to deliver his own child.
     

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